Shortest version of your pitch. GO!
Scott Kosmach
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Ilya Uglianitsa@ilya_uglianitsa
forYou Mobile App
Reduce wrinkles and get more glowing and healthy skin. Not in Instagram, in real life
Still working on it. Will reeeally appreciate the feedback. What do you think?
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@ilya_uglianitsa How about this for a start "Real glowing and healthy skin. No filters required." I think Glowing and Healthy suggest better looking skin, no need to mention wrinkles. But if you're looking to agitate peoples fear of wrinkles you could do this "Reduced wrinkles and glowing skin. No filters required.".
forYou Mobile App
NVSTly: Social Investing
profit from the best
Remember them, forever.
@rehan_choudhry1 You got me stumped, can't make it any shorter. 1 alternative: "Remember them always."
Out-of-the-box data pipeline specifically for paid advertising.
@stephanie_totty ok, ok. Let's see. How about "Instant data pipelines for advertising." or "data pipelines for advertising in a wink." or "1-click data pipelines for advertising."
@stephanie_totty "Instant advertising data pipelines."
Digital Technology Creative Director
@abco_specialties "Director of Creative Technology" or "Creative Technology Director". I think the word Creative suggest digital so I axed it. For now anyway, that may change when people start building AI controlled Robot artist.
Try it Before You Buy It at Click One to Get It!
@abco_specialties Try before you buy - click to get!
@abco_specialties Even shorter "Try before buy - click to get!" has a good 3 & 3 rhythm.
Spriteley Voxcells
Infinitely customizable avatars
@ericamadly "Tailorable avatars" is all I got to shorten it. But you nailed it.
Spriteley Voxcells
Welcome Spaces
The first client portal 100% dedicated to your customers' experience.
ā¦ unpopular opinion maybe ?
@maly_charbonneau not much fat to trim. But here's my shot "The first client portal dedicated to your customers' experience."
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