AppSummo advices and feedback

Hey Hunters, My product will be featured on AppSummo in 2 weeks and I just realized that if I was able to convert my prospects quiet successfully, I was not capable to pitch it in 1000 thousand words. I've thus written 2 pitches. Could you let me know which one looks best to your english speaking native eyes? Pitch 1: " WP Umbrella has been designed for Digital Agencies and Freelancers willing to provide with and justify premium maintenance services & fees to their clients. WP Umbrella is the most comprehensive monitoring plugin in the World. This includes: tracking WordPress PHP errors which can prevent poor performance and security risks, monitoring uptime, performance and site health. Our alerting systems will inform you in case of issues, so you will never have an angry client yelling at you because its website is down and you were not even aware of it. WP Umbrella also certifies uptime and performance so you can prove to your clients how great your work is!" Pitch 2: " " WP Umbrella is the most comprehensive monitoring plugin for WordPress. Use it to track PHP errors and mitigate downtime and slow loading times. Reliable Uptime and performance monitoring also included, so you will never let again a customer telling you that your/its website is down. The plugin is ideal for digital and marketing agencies willing to include maintenance fees in their quotes or WooCommerce store for whom uptime and performance truly matters. ” The product is available here: https://wp-umbrella.com Also, have you any tips or feedback to share with me on AppSummo campaigns? Looking forward reading your answers!