It's alright, good start! At least it's working. Just go shorter on what the app is doing and not the super ultra-long text, try to put a visual and then the vision you have at the bottom into a paragraph or two. That's quite a unique concept, an interesting take and it might lead somewhere great! I won't say anything about the design, it's good enough for me! I don't have the best design either ;D I would also make it as I can visit the app without signing up, like "login as a guest", which people may want to try before they sign in with their email. That's what I will go for at first! Best of luck!